The Lost Senshi
Theme: Otaku senshi


*ponders* okay, this is taking a VERY long time to come up in my browser. that's not the owner's fault though, brinkster is a shitty company. *time passes* I get a 'cannot be displayed' error. Oh well, I'll come back tomorrow then.
It's two days later, and the server is down for maintenance. I give up.


Is this thing ever going to load? I have about an hour's worth of time left online. If it doesn't load by then, this is all the review you're going to get. I'm off camping again, so I won't be able to continue this pointless little introduction. :P Then it goes page cannot be displayed... *hits refresh* Oh, NOW it decides to load...
Splash - Nuh-uh. Bad. No splash pages. Splash pages bad. Although the background is nice, it does kinda cut off and start again on one side.
Layout - At least it's a simple frame layout. Uh, is the left side going to load anytime soon? There we go. Well, it's not the greatest of pictures, but it's far from the worst. I like basic layouts. The green links are a bit hard to read, though.
Places Aian doesn't go - Updates, Guestbook, Exit, Site.
Story - Cute little symbol. Almost looks like an actually Sailormoon one. Amazingly hard to read the story itself. The text blends in witht he bg in some places, and I actually have to lean forwards to read. It's a pain the ass. For those prolfies you used Orion's little form thing, ne? It sure looks like it. I already said my bit with the text.
Images - Wow, there are some nice pictures in here.
Dammnit! Because I got kicked off in the middle of reviewing this, I didn't get to finish. And now it won't let me in. Sorry 'bout that-- if I can't get in, it's hard to review. *shrugs*


First thing I have to say is that I’ve been having a hard time getting on to this site in the past week. I think it’s a culmination of the fact that Brinkster sometimes does stupid things and the fact that my computer’s acting up. All right, I’m tired and I’m hungry, so lets get this over with. The splash page looks rather pointless if you ask me. The splash image isn’t very pretty; the green text used for the links is too light for that particular background. It’s cute how you use small and large O’s to separate the requirements (makes them look like bubbles), and the background is nice.
Main: The layout is all right. I must say that I do like the fanart picture, but theoretically shouldn’t her skirt be affected by the gravitational pull seeing that she is upside down. (this is the part where you’re supposed to yell out “Kaioh-san no ecchi!”). I really don’t like the colours you choose for the text. I also think that you should change the text type to one less bland. The main page layout looks like it has a large amount of blank space. Fill it with something. What is the significance of your senshi names? Sailor Atlantis, Sailor Dropides, Sailor Critias, Sailor Solon, and Sailor Plato…out of all those names the only ones I’ve heard before are Plato and Atlantis. Okay…Plato was a philosopher and Atlantis was a city so I just don’t see how they could be senshi. Now it’s time for the random name game, this is where I choose a name or a word and attribute it to a senshi; this’ll be fun. Sailor Napoleon, Sailor Shakespeare, Sailor Windsor…etc. What’s the point I’m trying to make? It just seemed like you picked things that sounded cool for your senshi’s names, and as far as I can tell none of these names are connected. I hope you at least point out the names’ significance some time on your site.
Story: Uh right…the profiles were really informative NOT! If you’re going to show me a picture of your senshi, then show me a full picture, not just a picture of an eye. The profiles should come before the stories. The only profile that was slightly informative was the Sailor Atlantis one; the others “bit the dust” so to speak. As for the story draining energy is not an original idea. Fanfiction isn’t particularly unique. None of these sections had back buttons.
Images: #$%&$& and then some, the connection with my server reset when I was browsing this section. The images were fairly well done and I like the descriptions and real thumbnails.
Fun: This part doesn’t look overly “fun”. Message boards should be reserved for larger sites; your site doesn’t get enough traffic to warrant one. The same goes for a chatroom and the wallpaper ended up showing up as dead for me.
Other: The FAQ question answered all questions I had concerning various things (just not senshi names). You should put an e-mail link on your FAQ page, so people don’t have to go to an entirely different area just to ask you a question. There’s nothing else I can comment about, Brinkster is being a b**** and not allowing me to look at your site, it’s not your fault, but there’s nothing I can do about it either.
Overall: The only pluses on this site were no spelling errors. There wasn’t really much content here, nothing kept my interest for very long, but then again I’m not into Otaku senshi fan. The only positive thing I can say about this page is that you know how to set up an image gallery and you’re better than the other site I reviewed this week (but then again, any site is better than the other site I reviewed this week). Brinkster really screwed up the navigation for me on this site, but overall I wasn’t impressed anyway. My suggestions are to get more content and develop a better story line. Also work on developing every character and explain the significance of the senshi names somewhere. I’m tired, and my PC is in just as sucky of a mood as I’m in.
From, A very tired Kaioh


Notes: Evil is fun, says the Nine! Lost Senshi isn't the most Never-Been-Used title...
Crash Count: 0
First thing I notice is that it has a splash page.
Second thing I notice is that "splash page" is a rather funny little pun, considering the layout.
Third thing I notice is that I should cut the sugar.
Alright. Let's break free of my amusing little antics for a moment, so I can actually review.
The layout's fairly nice. My only peeve is that the foreground bubbles are insanely different from the background ones. I wouldn't have done it that way, and it looks like you cut corners, but hey!
The fanfic, as far as matters of style go, is very well-written. The grammar is good, and it doesn't seem to repeat itself or read pretentiously. This is good. One thing I could suggest would be a plot synopsis.
Comments:

• Luna is Usagi's guardian and advisor. Why wouldn't she be at the meeting, or even told it was happening until after?
• Akuma means demon. With all the odd things going on, wouldn't Rei notice someone called "Demon" appear at her school JUST as Usagi has odd dreams? Especially if this person has a sort of etheral grace, et cetera. I'd expect Minako to do that, but Rei's the team mystic.
• There's no description on the girls when they first show up. Tsk. Sure, a bit afterward..
• Sailor Atlantis giggles? Call me crazy, but she doesn't strike me as the giggling sort. Either that or I'm just picky.
• How did Usagi lose her appetite just so soon after saying she was hungry in the typical Usagi fashion?

And there! I'm finished, thank goodness!
^-^ But I do like it, and may well stop by to read more often!
Now, on to characters.
I hate stats. A lot. A whole lot.
However, you back it
My one beef is that every main character in every BSSM fanfic I've ever read is either exactly like Usagi, or the cold, mysterious type. Why is that? Is there a law somewhere?
And a relationships category is my favorite thing on any profile page ever. So bonus points there! Spread this thoroughness to your other characters, there, and you'll be all set!
Another note is that Irish people speak English. There is no "Irish" language, except the ancient ones, which I'm not terribly familiar with. Gaelic, I believe, and Celtic.
And the fuku bit is copy-and-paste. Oops.
The pictures use first-person except in Sailor Atlantis' gallery. That's terribly inconsistent, and somewhat sloppy.
Edited images are things I am not a big fan of.
Fun time!
No, no fun time. Maybe I'll catch another reviewer in the chatroom..Damn! Expired! Now I can't go see if I can catch the other Last-Minute reviewers....(Everyone.)
FAQ just stops halfway down the page and refuses to start again.
Exit is link-related stuff. Favorite links is not up, and FFA links is self-explainatory.
In Link Us, you need to specify that the codes only work if you upload the image to the server, or more than half the people won't understand and will try to use the codes without uploading, to no avail.
All-in-all? There's not much here. I'd have more work if they had a few more chapters up and profiles and the like, but it seems that sites never submit for reviews after two chapters, it's the most I've ever seen. *sigh* Do ask for a re-review once I have more to read, hm?


Well, we always get off to a great start with splash pages don't we? Actually, this isn't that bad, since it's a nice color, the enter image is small, and this does serve some purpose.
Nice layout, it's soft on my eye's, though the text is bothering me alot. First of all, the color matches the background to much. If you want people top read it, make it readable. So what if black text might be uglier that teal. The text is also to small, and it's a gross font. Times New Roman sucks and everyone knows it, so please change it, I don't even want to read this. I guess I'll highlight it or something.
Oh wait, you didn't make the layout, darn.
Oki-doki, first of all, your over use of simple Japanese is bothersome. Please stop, I love the Japanese language, but I don't want it to be degraded by people trying to act like they know it and typing Japanese words with English characters. I find it disgusting, seriously, "KONNICHI WA MINNA SAAAAN!!!! WATASHI WA BAKA DESU!!! ATASHI WA DESU KA?!?!?!?!?". Would you like a translation?
Your story page is pretty cool :) The title image is very nicely done, and.... damnit! You didn't even do that yourself >_< What's the point?! Make your own graphics, please! This page isn't even yours, it's Spryng's >_<
The profiles are nice, and so are the stories, though I didn't read them, they look nicely organized. Good job, if you actually organized them... The pictures are nice too *nods* The wallpapers are nice too... ahem... Let the bodies hit the floor? I'm sorry, it's not my place to comment on something like this, but there's more original things you could've put on there. Maybe it's just me, I hate that song. But still, it's a nice wallpaper.
Oh... wait, there's more than one of you O_o Or maybe not... I'm not even going to ask, okay?
Please make your own things, don't claim this to be your webpage if all you did was write the fiction and profiles.